my daddy f-u-ck-e,d off , before i hit the earth
so you can imagine , that kinda s-h.i.t hurt
looking at my friends, playing with their paps
so if your a loving father , im paying you props
my mom was only 20, i ended and bust her youth
but she said it, was more rewarding seeing my first tooth
always getting up early,to head to work each day
being a shitty waitor ,carrying a beach tray
my grandad has m-s , but hed always rise above
to collect me from school , as i look with eyes of love
next stop the sweet shop, for a can of coke
robo cop sugar pop , the poor man is broke
the father i never got, hed take his shoes
if i was feeling down , hed brake my blues
always their for me, but now in a wheel chair
now its my turn to prove, that i really care
and then their was my nan , who spoled me material treats
who thought me about life , and our bacterial streets
thought me how to be a man , and right from wrong
but shed accept my decison , to light this bong
me and mommy moved out , when i was either five or six
now she was on her own , could she survive the kicks
as she parted her parents , moving to a quiet house
which was also the residence , for a many a white mouse
us we wernt the richest , but who really cares
because we would rather, have eachother than be billionaires
so lets do the mathimatics , my father never needed him
look what i have acheved, already exceeded him
if he went to one of games , hed see i was offencily skilled
ball hitting the back of the net , as i had the defence killed
should i finish
be truthful
also do you like my name im irish so changed it from irisCan i rap,,,rap hip hop?its great. who r ur influences?Can i rap,,,rap hip hop?Rhyme scheme is WAY too simple:
Six,
Kicks,
Add %26quot;internal rhymes%26quot;, meaning rhymes within your lines, not just end rhymes.
So besides the fact the you have almost no flow,
the content is good. =) So its a mixed bag.
